ME
Do you really know me?
You can know a lot of things about me, but do you know which things I like and dislike? Also I think that you know in this time that we have meting general things like my favorite color which is pink, that I have boyfriend, I decided to study ELT (English Language Teaching), I am studying in the Universidad Autonoma de Aguascalientes, I have brothers and sisters and that I love my two nieces.
It is important you know my personal information. My name is Rosa Guadalupe Araujo García, I was born on August 5th 1990.My horoscope is LEO I have one brother and one sister younger than me and one brother and one sister older than me. I am 20 years old. I am from Aguascalientes, but a lot of people think that I am from Japan because I look like a Japanese girl. I am living with my parents and siblings. Also I work with my aunt in a grocery store.
Do you like to know what things I like to do? I like to live together with all people that I love, as my family, my friends, my classmates and my boyfriend. I enjoy going to the cinema, and watch all kind of movies. I usually go to the cinema with my boyfriend. I like to eat; all people know that I eat a lot. I love the Mexican food like “pozole”,” enchiladas”, “mole”, etc. I like to hear stories about the past for example the live story of a person or an event that happened years before I born.
Although I like to do a lot of things, there are a lot of things that I dislike. I do not like to be next to people that smoke, I dislike the cigarette smell. I hate people who lie, or people who talk bad things about other people. I do not like going to the bullfight, because I dislike how people enjoy seeing an animal suffering. I do not like the Chinese food. I do not like the bittersweet flavor. I do not like horror stories in the night because these provoke that I could not sleep.
In conclusion, with this essay you could know what I like and dislike doing. You can have a general idea about how is a person, but if you know more things about this person like things that he/ she does, this idea can change. For this reason it is very important the following phrase:” appearances can be deceiving”. Our description not depend only our physical features, it depends of our likes and dislikes too.
remember to write 5 pharagraps. or maybe you join 2 into one??
ResponderEliminarHi Rox!!
ResponderEliminarI like your essay. It has coherence and cohesion.
I think you missing one paragraph. You can improve the first paragraph.
O_o if you copy-paste the whole essay in a word document, you can see that there are 5 paragraphs.
ResponderEliminarnice conclution, and no i dont thing that you looke japanesse.
I think your essay is well organized, but you should check the 2nd paragraph, it need some commas. The essay is clear, but I think it is to much information, i dont know if it is because of the kind of paragraph, but it seems more a profile, than an essay (why?). You can consider to write less ideas and more details (how?). You can explain why you like those things and why not.
ResponderEliminarBut I am not really sure, i have never written a paragraph like this. jijiji.